Art of Persuasion

Evaluation of Jackie's Blog

While I was reading Jackie's first draft of her first paper, I was surprised about how well the language came together in a rough copy like that. Most of her work doesn't need much revision, as her language is clear and concise as soon as it hits the page. I can see the effort that Jackie put into this course through her writing. When an draft starts out as good as hers did, you can tell that this is someone who took the time to put themselves in the "writing mentality."

I particularly like her writing style, as it is contrasted from my own. I tend to use long, drawn out, superfluous, sentences--with lots of interruptions (distractions) in between. Her voice has shorter sentences and well organized paragraphs that are easier to follow but do not take away from her "personal voice."

I liked her first paper especially, because she was talking about fighting the man as it relates to creativity in the composition classroom. I saw this belief reflected in the final draft of her memoir, as she really elaborated on what she was trying to say, citing sources as such. Although that isn't "the format" of the memoir, she made it work and kept her thinking true to herself, without compromising for the sake of the assignment.

I think Jackie's greatest quality as a writer is the way she constructs her arguments. I could read her paper fast or I could read it slow, and I would still get all of the information. I don't have much advice for her to improve her writing other than keep doing it, which I'm sure she will because she is an English & Writing student.

I feel like I am better at workshopping others' papers than I am at writing, but I was unable to do that too well with her work because her writing is far beyond mine, at least in ways that I'd like to improve, like not writing run-on sentences, or not having super jumbled thoughts....

Good job